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4.26, posted 17th Sep 2019, 6:06 AM, in Chapter 4: Handshake

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khkddn
17th Sep 2019, 6:06 AM

This is why Zan plays hockey and not baseball. If the bottle were on the ground and he had a stick, then... well, he'd still miss, but that's not the point-

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Microraptor
17th Sep 2019, 6:15 AM

It's, uh... the thought that counts. Right? Right!?


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    khkddn
    17th Sep 2019, 6:36 AM

    They'll defeat her with thoughts alone!


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    MK_Wizard
    17th Sep 2019, 6:32 AM

    Maybe these kids should invest in learning first aid.


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    khkddn
    17th Sep 2019, 12:01 PM

    It'd save them a lot of time if they carried a first aid kit with them.


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    CNightJoy
    17th Sep 2019, 11:45 AM

    Poor Zander. At least the pink ghost stopped screaming.


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    khkddn
    17th Sep 2019, 12:01 PM

    She was just so shocked by how bad a throw that was...


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    notkamalayx
    17th Sep 2019, 7:19 PM

    ...i'm gonna tell theo! :)


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    khkddn
    17th Sep 2019, 7:21 PM

    This one's def going in his Zander cringe compilation.


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    QuotePilgrim
    18th Sep 2019, 7:56 AM

    Well, this is not what I thought was going to happen.


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    khkddn
    18th Sep 2019, 12:36 PM

    I don't know what you expected, but I saw two possibilities. Either he throws the bottle and it goes right through her and breaks a window, or he completely misses.


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    QuotePilgrim
    19th Sep 2019, 10:34 AM

    I don't know exactly what either, but something along the lines of the ghost telekinetically grabbing the bottle and smashing it against a wall or even just exploding it mid-air.

    Maybe I'm just thinking of this scene like how I would write it rather than what actually makes sense for the story. The way you did it is probably much better than what I was expecting.


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    snuffysam
    18th Sep 2019, 5:46 PM

    Zan was just trying to bring out his Pokemon, Alcohowl :(


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    khkddn
    18th Sep 2019, 6:08 PM

    Threw the pokeball too hard, KO'd on impact :(


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